<h3><font color="#ed2308">清雅軒對聯(lián)比賽:</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 辭賦文章,因有蓮花香不盡;</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 柳十一曰:蓮花的隱喻是高潔、雅致,出句的意思是如果體現(xiàn)出了高潔的情操,那么你的作品就能被人們所傳誦,甚至于流芳百世,此處的蓮花是虛指,直接理解為像蓮花一樣的情感、文字。如果理解為凡是描寫蓮花的作品都體現(xiàn)了作者的高雅,那我覺得就有些偏離本意了,《愛蓮說》自有蓮花的高潔,《陋室銘》何嘗不是。有《減字木蘭花》一首為證:</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 閑居竹外,明月清風同盼睞。</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 辭賦文章,因有蓮花不盡香。</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 孤蓬何寄,困頓平生無限事。</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 攜酒登高,滾滾長江志未消。</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 另外,十一發(fā)現(xiàn),大家對于香字覺得不好對,很多用意、韻、夢等虛字相對,這些虛字如果能夠知道是什么,就用知道的東西去對,如果不知道是什么,那就盡量不用,尤其是韻字。實際上香字就是一個名詞(也可以看成形容詞),對名詞就可,如:</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 辭賦文章,因有蓮花香不盡;</font></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 清風明月,同來陋室竹相陪。</font></h3> <h1><font color="#ed2308"> 一等獎空缺</font></h1> <h1><font color="#ed2308"> 二等獎:</font></h1><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:冰洲</font></h3><h3> 雪松湘竹,然于君子品皆高</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 不錯,對句句意很好,但后七字可試改為相隨君子自清高</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:淺笑</font></h3><h3> 琴棋書畫,若無知己少流芳~</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 不錯,如無伯牙子期,《高山流水》何有人知,如無曾國藩,左公何能創(chuàng)不世之功。</font></h3> <h1><font color="#ed2308"> 三等獎:</font></h1><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:茉莉花開</font></h3><h3> 琵琶簫管,常隨月色樂無窮。</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 不錯,月下琴簫相和,其樂也融融。有詞為證:辭賦文章,琵琶簫管,相隨明月歌吟晚。清風隱隱送蓮香,不如歸去江湖遠。</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:鹿城</font></h3><h3> 蘭梅品性,儋無明月怎風流</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 不錯,蘭梅通常用梅蘭,如用幽蘭艷菊似乎好些。</font></h3><h3> </h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:孤城</font></h3><h3> 琴棋書畫,若沾銅臭味全無 </h3><h3> 不錯,琴棋書畫本是雅物,若是錙銖以計,卻是難受之至</h3> <h1><font color="#ed2308"> 鼓勵獎:</font></h1><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:在水一方</font></h3><h3> 酒肴歌舞,但憑竹笛樂無窮~</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,可用瓊漿韶舞,惟須絲竹自悠然</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:喬喬</font></h3><h3> 功名利祿,卻無志向夢成空~</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,可用如無志向自成空</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:峰山</font></h3><h3> 青山畫卷,為無月色夢難留~</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 不錯,青山如畫,明月如詩</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:老頑童</font></h3><h3> 柱雕聯(lián)墨,深含哲理意無窮。</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,前四字偏正,后七字不錯</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:秦時明月A</font></h3><h3> 蒼松氣節(jié),又逢綠竹聳云天。</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,又逢可用相陪</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:石齊光</font></h3><h3> 功名利祿,若無壯志夢難成。</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,但是覺得去掉前四字,句意也不變。</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:水兒</font></h3><h3> 春秋冬夏,唯吟月色韻無窮~</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,前四字以四個事物對兩個事物,不妥,后七字不錯</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:點點</font></h3><h3> 詩經風雅,吟懷楊柳意難平。</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 不錯,詩經·風雅篇中吟誦楊柳的詩句總讓人意氣難平。</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:難得糊涂</font></h3><h3> 良辰美景,若無酒色境差多</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 尚可,后三字可用奈如何</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句人:楚風漢韻</font></h3><h3> 冰霜雪雨,較之梅骨遜三分</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"> 句意不錯,但是什么與梅的風骨比較呢,我覺得可用清霜傲雪好些</font></h3> <h3><font color="#167efb"> 對句:</font></h3><h3>風流品性,自懷明月意千般(瀟瀟)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">~尚可,但意千般有些湊</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>丹青畫卷,但憑水墨韻千秋(清寒居士)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">丹青與畫卷合掌,后七字尚可</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3><font color="#010101">梅蘭風骨,怎無小境淡襟懷(鹿城)</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">小境二字不太理解</font></h3><h3><font color="#010101"><br></font></h3><h3><font color="#010101">逍遙歲月,再無案牘累無休(故我在)</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">無字重了,意境上有些偏</font></h3><h3><font color="#010101"><br></font></h3><h3><font color="#010101">參空色相,何須筆墨費千章(指間流沙)</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">參空二字失對</font></h3><h3><font color="#010101"><br></font></h3><h3><font color="#010101">夢魂翰墨,更添玉液韻長存(譚文靜)</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字不明其意,其中翰墨與文章合掌了</font></h3><h3><font color="#010101"><br></font></h3><h3><font color="#010101">詩詞字畫,豈無翠竹韻難成(秋韻)</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字合掌了,豈字用如好些,韻字太虛</font></h3><h3><font color="#010101"><br></font></h3><h3><font color="#010101">政勤官廉,皆為百姓福由來(林州小村醫(yī))</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字失對且格律有誤</font></h3><h3><font color="#010101"><br></font></h3><h3><font color="#010101">韻兒丹青翰墨,常教柳色韻清新(韻兒)</font></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">翰墨合掌,韻字太虛</font></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">書房墨寶,總憑詩意韻長留(醉靈兒</span><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">尚可,但是格局沒有脫離出句</span></font></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">書房字畫,更添筆墨千章(漫步)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">似乎少了一字</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">詩詞律韻,豈無雅境句難成(石齊光)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字合掌之嫌,豈字用如好些</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">樓臺山水,為生楊柳綠無邊(青苑)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,但是為字宜酌,另辭賦文章是兩個事物</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">高山流水,自懷遠境品長存(黃安m)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,試改為如無境界畫難成</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">山開畫卷,豈無碧水韻流長(聽風)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">辭賦是名詞,失對了,豈用如</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">春秋冬夏,皆須月亮自含情(挑水)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,試改為,曾隨明月自含情,另辭賦文章是兩個事物</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">梅蘭竹菊,但留品質世長存(聽濤)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,直白了些,另辭賦文章是兩個事物</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">風花雪月,豈無美酒樂開懷(紅塵客)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,試改為如無美酒豈開懷,另辭賦文章是兩個事物</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">佳</span><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">人美酒,更添月色韻無邊(南山松</span><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">不錯,韻字有些虛了,可以考慮用自含春</span></font></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">琴棋書畫,從來才女韻尤長(大海)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">辭賦文章是兩個事物,韻字在此不知何意</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">宮商角羽,常于曲樂韻流殤(云山路)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字和曲樂、韻大約相類,重復了</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">青春歲月,只為風雨韻無窮(皓月千里)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,還是韻字的問題</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">丹青水墨,常留月色碧無邊(南柯國主)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,碧無邊湊了,用自含情如何</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">杯傾歲月,為留秋水意難拋(天香)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">杯傾失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">風云歲月,若無梅酒醉還來(七尺)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,對句有酒不醉人人自醉的意思,但是后三字可考慮用醉依然</font></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1); line-height: 1.8;">丹青畫苑,怎無雪玉兆年豐(定安)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不理解,畫苑里的怎么會兆豐年</font></span><br></h3> <h3>歌吟畫舫,但憑碧浪韻流長(往事)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">歌吟失對</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>楹聯(lián)妙對,欣無美女韻難留(峰山)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">后七字湊了</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>風云歲月,惟憑筆架志難成(琴韻書芳)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,筆架二字的隱喻之意有些牽強,試改為如無韜略</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>雪松湘竹,然于君子品皆高(冰洲)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,對句句意很好,但后七字可試改為相隨君子自清高</font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">風吟小調,惜無流水韻難忘(云遮月</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308"></font></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">風吟失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">云游玉宇,身無羽翼自逍遙(云中仙)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">這是說的神仙嗎?云游失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">琵琶簫管,常隨月色樂無窮(茉莉花開)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不錯,月下琴簫相和,其樂也融融。有詞為證:辭賦文章,琵琶簫管,相隨明月歌吟晚。清風隱隱送蓮香,不如歸去江湖遠。</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">身居濁水,長懷玉骨自無塵(花辭樹)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">身居失對了,后七字很好,有出淤泥而不染的意思</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩書墨筆,為留明月酒已空(田園)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字略有合掌,后七字不錯</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">春秋冬夏,唯吟月色韻無窮(水兒)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,前四字以四個事物對兩個事物,不妥,后七字不錯</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩經風雅,吟懷楊柳意難平(點點)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不錯,詩經·風雅篇中吟誦楊柳的詩句總讓人意氣難平。</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">才華氣節(jié),莫為銅臭志更移(玉)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,但是感覺前四字好多余</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">風騷格調,若無香草韻何如(長蕩湖風)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">韻字不知道是什么,香草與風騷格調有何聯(lián)系?</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">油鹽柴米,必須巧婦味更濃(一片冰心)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">與出句隔意了,更出律</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">管弦絲竹,若無板眼曲難成(和依)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">管弦與絲竹合掌了,句意不錯</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">埋名老舍,了無俗累自開懷(無悔)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">埋名失對,句意不錯</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">笑談騷客,從來雪月老沒完(太爺)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">老沒完口語了</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">丹青畫卷,增添水墨妙無窮(夢幻藍天)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">丹青與畫卷合掌,另畫卷不是水墨畫成的嗎,更添是何意</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">德才公仆,更多政績譽常留(喜鵲登梅)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,但德才公仆是偏正詞</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">梅蘭竹菊,若無德品韻皆消(易水寒)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">韻字是什么意思,梅蘭菊竹是四個事物,辭賦文章是兩個事物,可用幽蘭傲竹之類</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">軍營歲月,常溫使命永當前(湘韻</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">尚可,但前四字偏正</span></font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">才華點畫,且無柳色綠成時(開心果</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308"></font></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字湊了</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">良辰美景,若無酒色境差多(難得糊涂)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,后三字可用奈如何</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">茫茫人海,若無愛人心情差(隆盛)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">此處差仄,出律了,前四字失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">黑狗倒灶,焚琴煮鶴渾閑事(豕俿)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">對聯(lián)是詞性相對、意境相聯(lián)且講究平仄格律的文學作品,對句似乎沒有理會這些</font></span><br></h3> <h3>菊梅竹子,絕非蒿草譽常華(喜鵲登梅)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字用寒梅傲竹好些,后七字不解</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3> 春秋故事,全憑歷史匯成篇(煙山野人)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字偏正了,全憑歷史沒明白意思</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>江山畫卷,只為天地日長新(挑水)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">此處為是仄音,后七字不理解</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>竹松氣節(jié),更臨雪景韻無窮(逸雨)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">用云松傲竹就可以體現(xiàn)氣節(jié)了,另外還是韻字的問題</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>山河景色,若無月季意難全(河水漣漣)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">山河是遠景,月季是近景,對句可能是用月季來點綴山河,但這個意象不適合</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>風騷教化,還須活水葉長新(飛魚)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">對句應該是想說文化是需要不斷創(chuàng)新的,但是表達有些亂</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>梅蘭竹菊,已隨騷客意無邊(雙魚)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字可用幽蘭傲菊,意無邊湊了</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>春秋歲月,偶橫竹笛韻無窮(平安)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">春秋與歲月合掌</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>高山流水,若無知己怎流傳(逍遙客)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">不錯,隱含了伯牙子期的典故,</font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">春秋筆墨,若無品位韻全消(望長天</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">春秋筆墨,是不是春秋筆法?</span></font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">仁人志士,為懷竹節(jié)譽千秋(沈邦彥)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,為懷可用長存,竹節(jié)宜直接用氣節(jié)</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩書禮樂,且懷玉露妙無窮(遲來的溫馨)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">詩書與辭賦文章略有合掌</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩歌學問,偏多綠蟻意無窮(南柯國主)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">詩歌與辭賦略有合掌,偏多二字宜酌,后七字有些勉強</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩書筆墨,若無明月夢難成(如意)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字略有合掌</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">迎新月日,只為幸福盼來頭(譚紹鈞)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">迎新失對,為字此處仄</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">江湖道義,一攜鬼笛信全無(小手冰涼</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">鬼笛是網絡小說嗎?沒明白意思</span></font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">風云往事,為無月色夜難眠(心中有愛)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,后七字是說因為沒有月色,所以徹夜難眠嗎?有些湊</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">凌云松頂,只為品格氣難輸(香如故)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">凌云失對了,為仄</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">琴棋書畫,若沾銅臭味全無(孤城)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不錯,前四字若用清音翰墨如何,后七字甚好</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">功</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">名利祿,皆為柴米欲難休(今生源</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">為仄,句意尚可</span></font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">冰霜雪雨,較之梅骨遜三分(楚風漢韻)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">句意不錯,但是什么與梅的風骨比較呢,我覺得可用清霜傲雪好些</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">閑游陌上,但求一朵慰孤懷(無悔)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">整句有流水的味道,可惜前四字失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">笛簫樂器,只憑絲竹韻無窮(紅梅)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">用清簫短笛好些,絲竹二字宜酌</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">江湖意氣,一壺老酒了恩仇(瀟瀟</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308"></font></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">一壺失對,句意尚可</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">宮商角羽,悉聽意境韻無窮(曉曉)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,試改為旋宮激羽,惟憑心境自悠然</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#010101">城鄉(xiāng)俚語,多含誓理引深思(禪蓮)</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不錯,但誓應是哲吧,前四字可用常言俚語</font></span><br></h3> <h3>詩詞聯(lián)對,豈無春色醉其中(一枝春上月)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,但前四字略有合掌,辭賦就是詩歌的一種文體。</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>琴棋書畫,若無知己少流芳(淺笑)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">不錯,如無伯牙子期,《高山流水》何有人知,如無曾國藩,左公何能創(chuàng)不世之功。</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>酒肴歌舞,但憑竹笛樂無窮(在水一方)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,可用瓊漿韶舞,惟須絲竹自悠然</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>刀橫碧水,奈何滿月韻添愁(聽風)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">刀橫失對</font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">言談舉止,應如松柏骨方直(漫步</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308"></font></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">直仄</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩聯(lián)書畫,為留清氣韻無窮(木樨)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">辭賦是詩歌的一種,略有合掌。</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">吟詩作對,欲書墨海畫無疆(無笛)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字失對了</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">功名利祿,卻無志向夢成空(喬喬)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,可用如無志向自成空</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">月開天地,但憑草木笑無窮(天使守護神)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">月開失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">青山畫卷,為無月色夢難留(峰山)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不錯,青山如畫,明月如詩</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">蘭梅品性,儋無明月怎風流(鹿城)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">不錯,蘭梅通常用梅蘭,如用幽蘭艷菊似乎好些。</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">琴棋書畫,若沾銅臭味全無(孤城</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><font color="#ed2308"><span style="line-height: 1.8;"></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">不錯,琴棋書畫本是雅物,若是錙銖以計,卻是難受之至</span></font></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩詞唐宋,甚欣李杜韻千秋(石定象安)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">詩詞略有合掌,后七字試改為如無李杜怎千秋</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">郎斟詩酒,只緣知己韻尤長(大海)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">郎斟失對,可用相陪知己歲悠長</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">曲添雅韻,偏為野史淚空流(天恩)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">曲添失對,為仄</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">詩經歌句,猶如日月韻長留(胡九一)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,后三字可用至如今</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">漁舟歲月,相攜竹笛韻長存(紅梅)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字偏正,后三字可用自悠然</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">馬放南山,卻無戰(zhàn)事愿難成(將軍)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">馬放失對</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">梅蘭竹菊,總為騷客夜無央(雙魚)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">為仄</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">海市蜃樓,呈現(xiàn)城樓景繁華(蒼穹神鷹)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">格律有誤,意境不相聯(lián)</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">梅蘭竹菊,緣多詩意魅無窮(海上明天)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,但魅力單用為魅,不妥</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">歌吟歲月,且憑日子富無邊(望天</span><span style="line-height: 1.8;">)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308"></font></span><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">前四字偏正,后七字不解</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">柱雕聯(lián)墨,深含哲理意無窮(老頑童)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,前四字偏正,后七字不錯</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">從戎書生,全憑憂國獻謀略(滄海一粟)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">從戎失對,略出律</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">禮義廉恥,皆緣華夏氣長存(人面桃)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">義出律,試改為中華民族,皆緣禮義氣長存</font></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><br></span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;">江湖夜雨,堪憐孤客醉無眠(心如止水)</span></h3><h3><span style="line-height: 1.8;"><font color="#ed2308">尚可,對句想化用“桃李春風一杯酒,江湖夜雨十年燈”,但前后句聯(lián)系不緊密</font></span><br></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>華夏文明,若無神韻雅成空(蘭舟催發(fā))</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">前四字出律了</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>蒼松氣節(jié),又逢綠竹聳云天(秦時明月A)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,又逢可用相陪</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>琴棋書畫,任無酪果趣難移(海軒)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">后七字不解,酪果代指什么?</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>風流歲月,但憑瀟灑樂無窮(開心果)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,不瀟灑怎生風流?</font></h3><h3><br></h3><h3>功名利祿,若無壯志夢難成(石齊光)</h3><h3><font color="#ed2308">尚可,但是覺得去掉前四字,句意也不變。</font></h3> <h3><font color="#ed2308"> 此次比賽大家非常踴躍,大出所料,十一也很開心,只是因為工作和家庭的原因耽誤了大家,在此深表歉意。十一所評一家之言爾,有誤人者敬請包涵。</font></h3>