<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">詩 會：中華慈善詩會</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">校 長：陌上花開</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">班主任：愛明、黃金歲月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">輔 導(dǎo)：惜 往 日、如水人生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">編 輯：愛明，如夢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作 者：律61班學(xué)員</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> （本篇各位作者已經(jīng)授權(quán)）</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">詩鐘：魁斗格又稱玉盒格。<span class="ql-cursor">?</span>將兩個題字分嵌上句首字和下句末字。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本次要求：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1.以“夏荷”作為鐘題進(jìn)行撰寫鐘聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2.平仄格律符合要求。應(yīng)多采用比喻、擬人手法使對聯(lián)生動、形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">3.上聯(lián)“仄”收，下聯(lián)“平”收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">4.下聯(lián)意境蓋過上聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">5.上下聯(lián)第5個字平仄分明，“5必究”。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1. 愛明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜行舟邀澹月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微風(fēng)拂面舞青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蟲低語吟明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">短笛輕歌伴碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人手法運(yùn)用得當(dāng)！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.薛鋒（如水人生）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏風(fēng)入水追明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉露尋幽戀碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜池塘迎皓月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳人鳳閣賞清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：畫面生動！形象！擬人得當(dāng)！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.如夢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夢無緣揮短棹，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨風(fēng)解意拂清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏木蔥蘢棲白鷺，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晴塘瀲滟出新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：詩情畫意！情景交融！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4.余明桂 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日當(dāng)頭搖翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">香風(fēng)撲面謝清菏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏風(fēng)拂柳邀明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">朝露迎霞戲碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：擬人手法運(yùn)用得棒！生動形象！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5.執(zhí)著 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蟲絲吐潛銀夜，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曉雨珠搖濯碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：描寫細(xì)致！形象生動！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6.竹林聽雨 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏首白堤環(huán)綠水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)前岸柳喚青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏月循規(guī)陪綠水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">香風(fēng)任性拂青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人手法得當(dāng)！景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7.上善若水 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏浦簫聲驚水鷺，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳塘月色贊風(fēng)荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?評：有聲有色！生動！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8.木瓜 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨逍遙撩白水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紅魚自在戲青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：情景交融！擬人生動！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9.默 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨初晴迎紫燕，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紅霞漸暖撫清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：色彩豐富！畫面感強(qiáng)！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10.洛兮 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日清風(fēng)扶翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天池綠水映新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">評：綠意盎然！涼爽！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11.王銘山 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日聽蛙藏翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">幽香醉我戀青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?評：調(diào)皮！童趣！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12.夢澔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日西湖迎翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秋時保俶問殘荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：分寫了西湖兩季的不同景色，對聯(lián)最好統(tǒng)一在一個畫面內(nèi)！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13.冉近逾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日濃情梳碧柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">香風(fēng)淡意戲青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏涼螢火爭明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜靜蛙聲伴秀荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：景中含情！有聲有色！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">14. 歲月如歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨邀蟬鳴翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清風(fēng)送鯉躍新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏風(fēng)梳柳歡新雨，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">明月撩波洗碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人得當(dāng)！生動形象！</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">15.臣民 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜青蛙歌岸壩，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微風(fēng)細(xì)雨拂新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：白描手法，直接了當(dāng)！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">16. 夏花 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜尋幽蛙隱水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">輕詩唱晚露藏荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：詩意的夏夜！倒樁可用！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">17. 怡然 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日薰風(fēng)搖碧扇，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">平湖細(xì)浪吻青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：比喻和擬人手法運(yùn)用得當(dāng)！美！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">18. 春江 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日歸來天上月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清風(fēng)起舞水中荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?評：擬人手法得當(dāng)！歸來可再琢！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">19.瓊之島 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏天紫燕穿垂柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水榭鳴蟲戲碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日弦歌同品茗，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晚風(fēng)舟楫共聽荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：虛實(shí)相生，愜意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">20.. 燕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏景婆娑迎彩蝶，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晴光旖旎接初荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：情景交融！上聯(lián)可再琢！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">21.玲兒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日趨涼尋亸柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山城對酒倚新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蟲難解多情竹，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫燕時懷雅意荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏枕清涼從翠篠，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨斟閑靜逐香荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?評：擬人手法得當(dāng)！景中含情！贊！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">22.竹韻琴心 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜吹蕭邀晧月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">熏風(fēng)送爽舞清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日鳴蟬棲碧柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芳池戲蝶舞青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人得當(dāng)！詩情畫意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">23. 開心果</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨傾情擁碧葉，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飛泉覓友浣青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人手法得當(dāng)！情景交融！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">24. 楊柳依依 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨隨心滋翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蜻蜓著意舞新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人得當(dāng)。景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">25. 天際云朵 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日青蛙歌戀曲，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">星空皓月醉清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：擬人手法得當(dāng)！令人陶醉！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">26. 劉國慶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蟬低語臨水榭，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微雨輕飄吻新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人得當(dāng)！富有詩意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">27. 王龍超 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨朦朧滋細(xì)柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖光瀲滟映清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：景中含情！上雨下晴，最好統(tǒng)一畫面！</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">28.清風(fēng) </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨時常滋碧柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨風(fēng)偶爾拂香荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏花濃艷招蝴蝶，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨露清純潤紫荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：直白簡單！直抒胸臆！景中含情！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">29.仰望星空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日微風(fēng)吟綠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晴云亮月賦青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：兩個動詞賦與簡單句子以詩意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">30.蘿卜纓子</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏草成荒埋曲徑，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清波蕩漾戲香荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：美景無人欣賞！可惜！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">31. 神采 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蟬聲遠(yuǎn)居高楝，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">塘埝風(fēng)香醉意荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：詩情畫意！景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">32. 李淑霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日驕陽迎綠水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳人亭閣詠靑荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：白描手法得當(dāng)！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p>