<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">出題組稿/劉偉 （若耶秋水）</p><p class="ql-block">作者/本軒詩人</p><p class="ql-block">點評/呂勇（江邊老呂）</p><p class="ql-block">制篇/初穎華（金禾秋韻）</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74); font-size:22px;"> 春柳</span></p><p class="ql-block">風(fēng)鈴度</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">東風(fēng)料峭自成妍，獨立長橋別意綿。</p><p class="ql-block">窈窕碧絲扶釣客，多愁白絮蕩浮煙。</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">審評：可。（轉(zhuǎn)句佳）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(57, 181, 74);"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">春柳</span></p><p class="ql-block">若耶秋水</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">碧染垂絲雙燕剪，鱗波猶趁小蠻腰。</p><p class="ql-block">多情似解離人意，十里飛花送綠橈。</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">審評：可。（合句自然順暢）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74); font-size:22px;">春柳</span></p><p class="ql-block">夢天行</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">如煙如雨映湖光，飄曳長堤碧玉妝。</p><p class="ql-block">橋畔依依曾惜別，舟隨流水遠(yuǎn)離鄉(xiāng)。</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">審評：可。（尾結(jié)不粘不脫）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">春柳</span></p><p class="ql-block">靜水</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">一縷喧風(fēng)夢醒來，驚睜俊眼顧埏垓。</p><p class="ql-block">臨湖梳下千絲碧，恰似仙娥拂鏡臺。</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">審評：可。（角度新穎）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">春柳</span></p><p class="ql-block">金禾秋韻</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">飛絮插枝隨處家，雨滋萬木早萌芽。</p><p class="ql-block">絲柔燕舞春煙墜，湖畔常依釣晚霞。</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">審評：可。（墜，下的不錯）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74); font-size:22px;">春柳</span></p><p class="ql-block">童心</p><p class="ql-block">臨岸東風(fēng)醒睡眼，新枝嫩葉使人憐。</p><p class="ql-block">多情垂下萬千綠，欲綰青絲系客船。</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">審評：可。（合句大氣）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74); font-size:22px;">指導(dǎo)老師簡介：呂勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">網(wǎng)名江邊老呂。早年求學(xué)合肥工大。因工作走過許多地方。已退休現(xiàn)居蕪湖。嗜好舊體詩詞曲及雜書。</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p>