<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025年5月9日，翠屏區(qū)老研會(huì)詩(shī)詞學(xué)習(xí)研討在百合酒樓舉行，會(huì)長(zhǎng)劉澤清主講漁陽(yáng)第二法七絕創(chuàng)作要領(lǐng)，副會(huì)長(zhǎng)、詩(shī)詞組組長(zhǎng)王倫貴主講詞牌《長(zhǎng)相思》創(chuàng)作技巧，會(huì)員張?zhí)m英主持學(xué)習(xí)研討會(huì)。詩(shī)詞組會(huì)員參加學(xué)習(xí)研討。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">關(guān)于漁陽(yáng)第二法創(chuàng)作要領(lǐng)，劉澤清老師講到：其核心是，前兩句說(shuō)一事，第三句用轉(zhuǎn)折詞將詩(shī)意轉(zhuǎn)向新的方向，第四句緊扣主題深化意境。轉(zhuǎn)折詞一般用“卻”、“偏是”、“雖”、“縱然”等詞。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作法示例有三：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虎山擅勝閣眺光福以雨阻不得住</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王士禎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虎山橋畔盡層松，掩映寒流古寺紅。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卻上重樓看鄧尉，太湖西去雨蒙蒙。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秦淮雜詩(shī)十四首·其二</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王士禎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">結(jié)綺臨春盡已墟，瓊枝璧月怨何如。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">惟馀一片青溪水，猶傍南朝江令居。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨水時(shí)節(jié)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉澤清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">和風(fēng)細(xì)雨潤(rùn)新芽，邊野蔥蘢著碧紗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">時(shí)值農(nóng)耕春播急，千村萬(wàn)戶(hù)共桑麻。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">關(guān)于《長(zhǎng)相思》的音樂(lè)性及如何就《長(zhǎng)相思》填詞，王倫貴老師講述：《長(zhǎng)相思》主題緊扣相思情節(jié)，詞牌就相當(dāng)于歌曲，它的音樂(lè)性就是根據(jù)曲填詞，根據(jù)詞譜樂(lè)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">詞牌《長(zhǎng)相思》在“詩(shī)詞吾愛(ài)”中收錄五種不同的形式，他著重講授了白居易體的對(duì)仗平仄及用韻要領(lǐng)。并以《長(zhǎng)相思.水空流》作演示。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">汴水流。泗水流。(疊)流到瓜州古渡頭。吳山點(diǎn)點(diǎn)愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仄仄平。仄仄平(疊)。平仄平平仄仄平。平平仄仄平。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思悠悠。恨悠悠。(疊)恨到歸時(shí)方始休。月明人倚樓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仄平平。仄平平(疊)。仄仄平平平仄平。仄平平仄平。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">兩位老師講述后，分別布置作業(yè)，要求一周內(nèi)完成，經(jīng)審閱修改，再編入美篇。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">最后，會(huì)員們各抒己見(jiàn)，談感想，有的按照漁陽(yáng)第二法作詩(shī)，詞牌《長(zhǎng)相思》填詞作現(xiàn)場(chǎng)交流。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">《長(zhǎng)相思》填詞習(xí)作：</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.黃鶴樓寄懷（白居易一）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王倫貴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江水悠。淚光悠。波涌千灘白鷺洲。煙波蝕客舟。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">念難收。盼難收。待到晴川鸚鵡洲。月明雙鶴樓。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思?暮秋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉澤清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枯草黃，落木黃。鴻雁聲聲欲斷腸，音書(shū)寄故鄉(xiāng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">露生霜，頭生霜。獨(dú)倚危欄思遠(yuǎn)芳。夜寒冬夢(mèng)長(zhǎng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.念母恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">顏其良</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山一程，水一程，庚月悠悠思母情。朝思復(fù)暮縈。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燈一更，夢(mèng)一更，銀發(fā)輕梳影自橫。醒來(lái)眸淚盈。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.憶母親</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黃長(zhǎng)亮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜深幽，夢(mèng)中幽。慈愛(ài)呈祥夢(mèng)未休，盈眶淚水流。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思悠悠，念悠悠。美好天堂無(wú)病愁，緬懷心上留。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.憶母（白居易體)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">胡敬揚(yáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜深幽，夢(mèng)里幽，慈愛(ài)英容夢(mèng)里游，心中點(diǎn)點(diǎn)愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思悠悠，念悠悠，恨到歸時(shí)方始休，禊堂無(wú)復(fù)愁。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思·母親節(jié)感懷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 程偉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)一程，雨一程，霜染慈顏年歲征，音容夢(mèng)里縈。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">悲也凝，念也凝，空?qǐng)?bào)春暉涕泗零，仙凡思雁聲。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思·頌?zāi)赣H</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鄧藝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">情也悠，愛(ài)也悠。朝暮操勞歲月酬，慈心似暖流。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">念無(wú)休，恩無(wú)休。育李培桃霜染頭，德馨千古留。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.難忘學(xué)友情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蔣仕倫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">同春秋，共春秋，三載同窗苦作舟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒窗共讀求。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思悠悠，念悠悠，五十飛云清淚流。一逢能再否？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.同志情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉吉良</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">同志情，事業(yè)情，滔語(yǔ)殷殷勵(lì)后生。金言啟智明。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晝勤耕，夜勤耕，熱血丹心超俊英。杏壇桃李榮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.念同窗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">張?zhí)m英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)一程，雨一程，遙念同窗別緒縈。流年暗里行。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水相迎，山相迎，退養(yǎng)身閑心自?xún)A。盼逢霜鬢情。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思 立夏抒懷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">趙文彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)輕輕，雨輕輕，初夏新荷映水清，蛙聲繞小亭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夢(mèng)初醒，酒初醒，滿(mǎn)院榴花詩(shī)眼明，忽然聽(tīng)鳥(niǎo)鳴。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思 · 思鄉(xiāng)情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黃睿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">念故鄉(xiāng)，惦故鄉(xiāng)，游子登高望遠(yuǎn)方，心酸自舉觴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雁飛翔，鴿飛翔，夢(mèng)想佳音箋滿(mǎn)藏，解愁佳日傷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長(zhǎng)相思.懷念（白居易一）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 蔡明英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳溪流。竹溪流。流到青龍古渡頭。當(dāng)年互伴游。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思悠悠。念悠悠。夢(mèng)到驚醒還未休。緬懷心里留。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">漁陽(yáng)第二法習(xí)作：</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">發(fā)財(cái)樹(shù)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蔡明英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">陽(yáng)臺(tái)觀賞樹(shù)，生命力超強(qiáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雖不勤澆水，蔥蘢綠葉常。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">學(xué)習(xí)漁陽(yáng)第二法</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王倫貴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">學(xué)習(xí)漁陽(yáng)用做詩(shī)，句三轉(zhuǎn)折以明規(guī)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">縱非鐵律硬條件，卻是名言須守持。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">漁陽(yáng)第二法感賦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">張?zhí)m英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">會(huì)長(zhǎng)精心妙計(jì)傳，漁陽(yáng)二法授跟前。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">已然有幸金針度，詩(shī)海揚(yáng)帆趁曉天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夢(mèng)回鄉(xiāng)關(guān)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉澤清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">月冷風(fēng)寒客夢(mèng)長(zhǎng)，歸心似箭暗神傷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">縱然漫漫家山路，千里猶聞樽酒香。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜賞桂林兩江四湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黃長(zhǎng)亮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雙塔巍峨鎮(zhèn)兩江， 四湖勝景美名揚(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">豈知云起雨飛下， 夜賞燈明璀璨光。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">初夏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">胡敬揚(yáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微風(fēng)輕拂柳絲揚(yáng)，火樣榴花韻味長(zhǎng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卻是田園耕播急，秋來(lái)共慶谷盈倉(cāng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">初夏即景</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蔣仕倫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翠幕垂垂日影斜，新荷出水試輕紗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">縱然春卉全凋謝，猶有榴英勝晚霞。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏思</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">趙文彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">綠樹(shù)熏風(fēng)夏日長(zhǎng)，蟬聲高唱過(guò)南墻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">縱然暑氣熱如火，猶有清風(fēng)送晚涼。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山行幽境（新韻)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">顏其良</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山路蜿蜒入翠枝，野花滿(mǎn)徑鳥(niǎo)聲稀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卻逢溪水橫前阻，獨(dú)坐聽(tīng)泉意自迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日山行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉吉良</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">參天大樹(shù)聳云霄，澗水潺潺白玉飄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">偏是孩童吹牧笛，林蔭深處聽(tīng)生簫。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日閑居</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鄧藝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">綠樹(shù)濃陰夏日長(zhǎng)，蟬聲入耳韻悠揚(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卻嫌炎熱難為客，獨(dú)坐幽篁納晚涼。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">游酒圣山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黃睿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花繁樹(shù)繞綠蔭蒼，吹拂東風(fēng)四溢香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雖有五糧瓶作伴，適逢游客醉難忘。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">母親節(jié)感懷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程偉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霜風(fēng)蝕骨路逶迤，歲歲劬勞鬢染絲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卻嘆慈顏歸鶴駕，空庭猶憶笑融怡。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">母親節(jié)思母親</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">解玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三餐美食細(xì)心烹，四季關(guān)懷伴我行。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卻是兒時(shí)嗔怪語(yǔ)，方知母愛(ài)最深情。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鄭重申明：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1、收錄詩(shī)詞排名不分先后！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2、篇中部分圖片來(lái)自網(wǎng)絡(luò)下載，如涉侵權(quán)，可聯(lián)系刪除！</span></p>