<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二零二五年十二月上社課</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">要求：以入聲二沃作五言絕句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刊頭題字 ：蔣孝余</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">收集簡(jiǎn)評(píng) ：周國(guó)慶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">美篇編輯 ：趙以順</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明英】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">采蘑菇</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">拾菌入林間，籃空心亦足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">惟嫌驚鳥飛，攪了此閑局。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">開荒種地</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老來霜發(fā)束，汗滴滋疇綠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日日摘鮮蔬，消閑又自足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;">評(píng)：閑適自在。即將退休的悠閑生活，好生讓人羨慕。惟摘蔬稍覺俗，“日日堪采芹”，豈不更符合女史特征。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【祝西峰】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">砍柴二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蒼崖高復(fù)低，日下山溪淥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雉響在南坡，樵歌三兩曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">樵夫不寂寞，山鳥聲如曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">俯仰全憑性，渾忘榮與辱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：達(dá)觀忘我。俯仰隨心，山鳥曲猶樵者曲，也是個(gè)好心態(tài)。卻有眼氣我等尚須努力者之嫌。給個(gè)差評(píng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【文受剛】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">致富農(nóng)家迎親即景</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?要得良田沃，干中尋不足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">為人苦讀書，自有千鐘粟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">轎中聞小曲，草上添新綠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">炮仗去迎親，椿萱心意足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">有情成眷屬，堂上燃花燭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翹首盼新人，朝門頻躑躅。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">創(chuàng)業(yè)求知欲，宵旰相繼續(xù)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">精明有志人，抱得顏如玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：農(nóng)村新景。民俗民風(fēng)，淳樸如是，鑼鼓喧天，喜氣洋洋，有情人終成眷屬，雙親也是心里美滋滋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【鐘華】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">遠(yuǎn)征軍</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">少壯別雙親，舍身御外辱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九死究可悲，英雄落冤獄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">柬泰開戰(zhàn)</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">巧語布天羅，高薪去難贖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暹羅揮王師，誓拔此瘤毒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：前詩慷慨悲壯，后詩痛斥侵略，義正辭嚴(yán)，可謂諍言。惟覺后詩立意似有瑕，若從領(lǐng)土爭(zhēng)端、利益趨使角度立意，是否更好些。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【汪守先】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">作 詩</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出語存清婉，作詩厭淺俗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浩歌入雅情，古調(diào)翻新曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">快 然</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">放懷氣象新，覽物閑情篤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">快然雅句成，春風(fēng)哦朗旭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">高 步</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清襟帶野色，高步吟鄉(xiāng)曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨潤(rùn)物華妍，詩敲山水綠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：其一袪俗，其二豁達(dá)，其三清麗，均見高情，三章可作一章讀。汪哥真雅士也。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">【趙以順】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">春行二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">其一</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯語自南枝，潺潺溪水綠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山櫻孕素苞，只待春風(fēng)觸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">其二</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">煙柳拂春堤，沿溪透淺綠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">銀魚巡岸來，水暖譜新曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：冬已至，春未遠(yuǎn)，人若懷春意，節(jié)序何擾心。若兮筆下，春情噴薄，春味可掬，果是達(dá)人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【 謝 勇 】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">病中吟</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">生事難余粟，病多常禁足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">窗風(fēng)薦雅音，非是南薰曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">得閑</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">因病得清閑，詩心不拘束。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">彤毫避舜堯，字字念塵俗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：病體難禁詩心，清風(fēng)時(shí)送弦音，筆下雖有沉郁，未見一俗字，贊。又，勇哥抱恙，不曾得知，萬望安好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【周國(guó)慶】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">重看西游</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">年少愛猴王，除妖真有趣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">而今看眾妖，個(gè)個(gè)皆如玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">出 川</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">狼煙虐故園，壯士出巴蜀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">魂斷路南柯，殘陽壟上綠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;">評(píng)：拙作。隨手湊句。不堪卒讀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明鵬】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">中夜聞曲</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜半驚幽曲，商音如碎玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">伏聽寒雨生，誰把瑤琴續(xù)？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">冬 日</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霜楓染碧落，白草鋪山峪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雁影逐寒煙，風(fēng)聲渾似玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：前者蕭瑟，后者空闊，寥落之景，度君之情。故曰，君莫聽商音，觸景易傷心。寒冬到了，春天還會(huì)遠(yuǎn)么？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【梁正森】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">歲暮二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">學(xué)后知不足，心緒總?cè)缡?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作詩恨詞窮，時(shí)常擬俚曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">是誰在攪局，歲暮多感觸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">身陷牢籠中，何事不受束。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：人在囧途，幾經(jīng)蹉跎，君既灑脫，何妨長(zhǎng)歌。浮世紜紜，不如意者十之八九焉。試以此二首窺之，作者似有矯情之嫌。一笑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【劉先倫】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">訪圣云寺詠懷</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紅塵來煉獄，誰點(diǎn)七星燭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">生出玲瓏心，卻中此方毒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">流年那可續(xù)，誤食情花毒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蘭若半節(jié)香，能把青春贖?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">評(píng)：中年說惜時(shí)，參禪能悟否？佛云，不可說。我道先倫多瀟灑，先倫向佛訴真情。呵呵，原來是個(gè)癡人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p>