<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鐘題：嵌字，“長、歌”</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">魁斗格，兩題字分嵌于上句首字和下句末字，注意小類工對。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">示例：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嵌入入入入入入入</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">ロロロロロロ嵌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">書寫格式如下：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">例：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1. 蘭心</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長亭酒暖陽關(guān)曲；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大漠風(fēng)寒易水歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2. 靜心</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長征路漫風(fēng)景美，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">續(xù)寫人生感嘆歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">“景”字處應(yīng)為平聲，失替。長游/續(xù)寫，動賓/偏正，路漫/人生 不工，風(fēng)景美/感嘆歌結(jié)構(gòu)不工，意境尚可，詩鐘要求非常嚴(yán)格的對仗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3. 夢語閑云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長劍倚天懸北斗；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒笳吹月動西歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律無誤，對仗工整。意境雄渾，邊塞氣息濃厚。唯西代表西域，較牽強。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4. 曉慧</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長江后浪推前浪；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大海深情詠嘆調(diào)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浪……浪，歌……歌，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">屬于規(guī)則重復(fù)，一般情況下是允許的。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">但詩鐘崇尚精煉，尤其是嵌字，最好避免所嵌的字重復(fù)。后浪/聲歌不工，推前浪/詠嘆調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)不匹配。意境上佳，但作為詩鐘創(chuàng)作，不夠嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5. 趙景林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長天有淚忠魂曲；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">英烈回家正氣歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律工整，意境深遠，長天/英烈 小類對仗略寬。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6. 韓東林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長堤默讀思鄉(xiāng)賦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">短笛輕吹離恨歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律無誤，對仗工穩(wěn)，詩味濃郁。佳作學(xué)習(xí)啦。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7. 靜心</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長天碧空鴻雁遠；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小巷笛聲伴柔歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">“空”應(yīng)仄。笛聲/碧空，失對失替。長天/碧空意近，笛古仄，碧仄，平仄不對應(yīng)。鴻雁/遠，伴/柔歌，節(jié)奏不搭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8. 韓東林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">歌悲四面家鄉(xiāng)遠；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">月照千峰羈旅長。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">此為“魁斗格”反嵌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">對仗工整，意境蒼涼，表達了游子思鄉(xiāng)情懷。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9. 原野</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長天孤獨千杯酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">滄海渺茫萬首歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律工整，意境開闊，豪放灑脫。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10. 夢語閑云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長帆遠渡滄溟水；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">短笛輕吹綠柳歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律無誤，對仗工穩(wěn)，意境清新。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11. 秋雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長河落日孤煙直；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大漠飛沙壯士歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律無誤，對仗工穩(wěn)，意境雄渾壯闊，化用王維名句，氣勢磅礴。直/歌 對仗略寬，但不失為佳作，點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12. 瀟瀟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長空萬里迎忠骨；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大地千聲唱贊歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律無誤，對仗工穩(wěn)。點贊??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13. 博樂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">長河落日紅霞舞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大義捐軀正氣歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">格律無誤，對仗可酌。上比寫景，長河、落日、紅霞，下比言志，大義、捐軀、正氣，上下比意境略顯跳躍。紅霞舞/正氣歌，小類工對略寬，整體意境不錯，但錘煉不足。還不錯??????????????????</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">總結(jié)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">第一次嘗試詩鐘練筆，整體不錯，向各師學(xué)習(xí)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">對聯(lián)和詩鐘是格律詩的基礎(chǔ)，老師們有時間多讀古人七言律詩的中二聯(lián)，體會其對仗的精妙。詩鐘是文字游戲中的格律詩，其魅力在于戴著鐐銬跳舞的精準(zhǔn)與美感。期待各位更精彩的作品！????????????</span></p>